The Official Writing Challenge
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01/21/08
This is on topic and has good possiblities with a little proofing and tweaking, and perhaps a little more content. For example: I know you meant hot African 'sun' in your opening sentence. Good effot. Nice story. Please keep writing~
01/21/08
I mean "effort" (see...I should proof my own comments!) :0)
01/22/08
This is humbling to those of us who have so much!
Put a space between a number and the next word (5 kilometers, 9 o'clock)
Right on topic...keep writing.