The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job with the topic, and the first several paragraphs were very compelling.
You kept my interest with this. I love your descriptive paragraphs of Jonah's experience with the whale. Keep writing!
I think I was almost gasping in the beginning of your story. You described the scene very well! Great job!
Wonderful first three paragraphs written from Jonah's point of view. Change of voice at the fourth paragraph lessens the impact of the moral.
Wow! Great descriptions!
I like how you started out with a narrative.
Perhaps there was too much in this. You had to imply the story of the gourd. Sometimes a little bit is stronger than too much.
Good job...keep writing.
Congratulations, Ebony, on placing 8th in your level with this piece. Great work!