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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “A Stitch in Time Saves Nine” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/03/08)

TITLE: Little Jimmy DeLay
By Jimmy Green
01/09/08


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Think not him wise
Young Jimmy DeLay.
“Foolish is more like it.”
Most folks would say.
Since he is the lad
Whose barn was burned
While playing the game
For which his little heart yearned.

T’was the fall of ‘07
Thus most of the leaves had fell.
So Jimmy piled them together
For the purpose of burning--how swell!
He arranged them just so
And taking great care
Stuck a match, and viola!
Smoke filled the air.

Soon the fire grew hot
The flames danced around.
When suddenly some neighborhood lads called,
“Grab your football, and meet us in town!”
Jimmy knew there was work left to be done,
But with his team he wanted to play.
“A little game wouldn’t hurt”, he thought
As he grabbed his ball off the hay.

Running up to the field
The game started right away.
Everyone was having so much fun,
Jimmy just knew it was going to be a wonderful day!
An hour went by.
And the next thing he knew,
Jimmy and the lads had been playing
Not for one hour, but two!

Now he remembered his chore
And told the lads he had to return.
Explaining, “I don’t want anything
Except the pile of leaves to burn.”
“The fire’s just fine!”
They said with a shout.
“Just give it more time--
It’ll burn itself out.”

So pausing for one more score
Little Jimmy did wait.
And by doing exactly that
Did he seal the barn’s fate.
For at that very same time
The fire began to spread.
And if the barn could have grown legs,
It surely would have fled!

Now, what can we learn from
Such a tale of woe?
Perhaps if we look real closely,
The truth would thus show:
The barn would have been fine.
Everything would have looked the same.
Were it not for little Jimmy’s
DeLay of the game!


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James Clem 01/10/08
Well told story in verse - which is not easy to do. (I can't comment on the poetical aspects, because I lack that talent.)

Very creative entry.
Jan Ackerson 01/10/08
I like the pun in the boy's name.

A little bit of work on the rhythm would improve the flow of this poem.

I enjoy story-telling poems, and this one was fun to read.



Yvonne Blake 01/15/08
A Poem!
A nice moral to your story!
The rhythm is a bit irregular, but your rhyme is good.
Keep writing.
Joanne Sher 01/18/08
Congratulations, Jimmy, on placing 15th in level 1 with this entry. Great job!