The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/08
Well told story in verse - which is not easy to do. (I can't comment on the poetical aspects, because I lack that talent.)

Very creative entry.
01/10/08
I like the pun in the boy's name.

A little bit of work on the rhythm would improve the flow of this poem.

I enjoy story-telling poems, and this one was fun to read.



01/15/08
A Poem!
A nice moral to your story!
The rhythm is a bit irregular, but your rhyme is good.
Keep writing.
01/18/08
Congratulations, Jimmy, on placing 15th in level 1 with this entry. Great job!