The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/08
It's so hard to be a teenager today! You've really captured that well.

I think this wold be more effective it written all in past tense. As is, it jumps about a bit--slightly disorienting to the reader.

You've created some characters that the reader can really care about...good job.
01/10/08
How lucky she is indeed to be brought up knowing God and His ways. I love how she is supportive of her friend, AND she goes to her mom for help, too. I agree with Jan's comment about the tenses, but otherwise a very enjoyable piece.
01/11/08
This is very good! I just kind of wished it was in present tense, or maybe a first person POV, so I could 'get into' the whole story. I'm glad that Robyn had some support from Lisa and wasn't shunned because of what she did.
01/12/08
Aren't friends great? I also moved just before my senior year. I missed my old friends so much!
I would have liked some dialogue between the girls.
Good job...keep writing.