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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: birthday (05/23/05)

TITLE: Celestial Space...
By Juanita Pittman-Brown
05/23/05


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There is a light
Far beyond the sun --
It is a Holy light
To which one day
You will come...
It is the light
That was in existence
Before your day
Of birth --
It is the light
That calls you
After your travels
Upon this earth...
It is the beacon
That summons
You one day
To leave this soil behind
Where upon Heavenly rise
One day you will find --
That it is spreads
Its beams from
THE LIGHTHOUSE
Upon a distant shore --
Where one day
You will arive
From earthly less
To Heavenly MORE...
See beyond this life
Past the darkness
You may view --
For there is a Holy Light
There awaiting you...
It is the light
Of ETERNITY --
The light that
Draws you there
Where you will abide
In Perfect PEACE
To no longer
Earthly troubles share...
There one day
Your soul will abide
In the Light of God
Past the yet unknown
Past these earthly cares
Past this earthly sod...
Look beyond
The horizon
That lies before
Your face --
Past the tipping
Of earth to sky
For there lies
Your eternal home
Within
Celestial space...


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Delores McCarter05/30/05
You chose words that gave great imagery. Only two suggestions, please space in between your poem so the reader knows when to pause. Also, since this is a rhyming poem, the meter (cadence) was slightly off a bit. But if this wasn't a rhyming poem, it wouldn't matter as much. Other than those two things, I think this was a great effort from you. I can easily see this poem on a plaque. Again, great choice of words!
darlene hight05/30/05
Very nice. A great take on the theme. A heavenly perspective.
Phyllis Inniss 05/30/05
I like this poem and the lines 'from earthly less To Heavenly MORE'.
MILENA ASSENOVA06/03/05
very creative, thanks for sharing. God bless
Debbie OConnor06/03/05
Very nice! I enjoyed the images you evoked. I agree more white space would be helpful. I also think the meter was a bit forced at times. However, on the whole this is a very good read. Great job!
dub W06/04/05
I truly love free form poetry, even if it is rhymed. This is well done and deserves consideration.
Amy Michelle Wiley 06/04/05
Beautiful poem.