The Official Writing Challenge
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05/30/05
You chose words that gave great imagery. Only two suggestions, please space in between your poem so the reader knows when to pause. Also, since this is a rhyming poem, the meter (cadence) was slightly off a bit. But if this wasn't a rhyming poem, it wouldn't matter as much. Other than those two things, I think this was a great effort from you. I can easily see this poem on a plaque. Again, great choice of words!
05/30/05
Very nice. A great take on the theme. A heavenly perspective.
05/30/05
I like this poem and the lines 'from earthly less To Heavenly MORE'.
06/03/05
very creative, thanks for sharing. God bless
06/03/05
Very nice! I enjoyed the images you evoked. I agree more white space would be helpful. I also think the meter was a bit forced at times. However, on the whole this is a very good read. Great job!
06/04/05
I truly love free form poetry, even if it is rhymed. This is well done and deserves consideration.
06/04/05
Beautiful poem.