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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “A Stitch in Time Saves Nine” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/03/08)

TITLE: The Lullaby
By jodie banner
01/07/08


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Beautiful precious baby.
Beautiful breath of life.
God has given a baby,
through much pain and strife.

His angelic scent of innocence,
imparts a mothers cry,
a silent whispered promise,
a melodic lullaby.


"My beloved cherub,
asleep here on my arm,
I'll guide you thru life's paths,
and keep you safe from harm.

I'll model Christ's love.
I'll teach you to obey.
I'll read you the scriptures,
And everyday I'll pray.

Then you'll learn of Christ's love,
Obey Him Happily.
You could know your Saviour,
and live eternally."


A prayer of desperation,
seeps from a wounded heart.
Confusion clouds a Mothers mind,
who thought she did her part.


"I tried to do my best Lord.
That child would not obey.
His screams just broke my heart,
I had to bend his way.

I'm sure he had a bible,
was given his first year.
I took him to Sunday School,
I thought he read it there.

I wish there'd been more time Lord,
for me to kneel and pray.
But life was just so frantic,
the days, they slipped away.

I'm on my knees before you,
My son has lost his way.
I thought he knew you ,Jesus.
be merciful, I pray."


A mother sinks into the floor,
she smooths her faded dress.
She trembles as she breathes a prayer,
of hope and faithfulness.


"I disciplined him every time,
he dared to disobey.
Even when it broke my heart,
to hear him cry that way.

We memorized Your treasured verse,
Tho' others scorned our ways.
Your scriptures brought us peace Lord,
when life brought troubling days.

Thank you, Lord for answering,
my simple whispered prayers.
Through every childhood trauma,
You were always there.

I thank you for your grace,
as I kneel beside this pew.
The altar call was given.
My son has come to you!"


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Patty Wysong01/10/08
What a testimony to a mother's heart and prayer. I was a little confused at the progression of time, but then noticed the extra spaces--you certainly captured the turmoil we feel at times!
Marita Thelander 01/10/08
I enjoyed this poem. Not sure I see the theme of teh challenge in it, but I am certainly no expert! I did enjoy reading it ; )
William Stevenson01/10/08
I like it! however it lacks rythm, but is full of emotion and heartfelt expression. I'm no poet, learning just like you. go for it.
Jan Ackerson 01/10/08
Sweet poem...probably not on topic, but lovely nevertheless, and should be encouraging for people going through difficulties with wayward children.
Julie Ruspoli01/10/08
Oh what a wonderful poem. It flows so well, had great rythme and the message is wonderful.
So many realize late in their childs life that they need to have Christ in their lives more than just sending their kids to church with someone else.
The ending was very special and made me cry. I am so glad the child came to Christ in the end.
Italics would have made the seperate sections easier to understand, but the spaces still helped.
Keep writing for Him.
Yvonne Blake 01/11/08
Wonderful...and right on topic!
What a good example of God's faithfulness!
I noticed that you needed to capitalize the first word in each line. Good use of words and punctuation.
Keep writing.
Dee Yoder 01/14/08
Wonderful contrasts between the mother who prays and disciplines and the mother who doesn't do either. It's interesting that both moms start out with the same love, but only one has the wisdom to know how to grow her child properly.
Rita Garcia01/14/08
I love this, and think it hit the topic in a big way! God has blessed you with a marvelous talent!
Ann Renae Hair01/14/08
AMEN! When we do our part, we can confidently leave them in God's hands...without regrets.
Maybe separate with asterisk. I didn't 'get it' until I read comments, even though I enjoyed the entry.
Right on topic...beautiful.
Linda Watson Owen01/14/08
You have the ability to reach right into your readers' hearts! I loved reading your poem and look forward to reading more. In this one perhaps, a more distinct clue to the reader that the 'better mother' is another person would help with clarity. That's an easy fix. Thank you for this lovely entry!
Betty Castleberry01/14/08
I love rhyming poetry, and I think you did a very good job with this. The message is sure to touch any mother's heart. I stumbled a time or two on the rhythm, but all in all, this was really nice. Thumbs up.
Joanne Sher 01/14/08
This touched me in a very, VERY deep way. Just lovely and convicting and heartfelt.
LauraLee Shaw01/14/08
Lovely, heartfelt and touching.
Catherine Pollock01/14/08
Beautifully done. This is a great illustration of the topic. :)
Janice Cartwright01/14/08
Lovely poem - I like the patterns that seem to echo young life.
Holly Westefeld01/14/08
I, too, had to go over it several times to figure out just how many mothers and children were included. I think that the first five stanzas were most like a lullaby.
Verna Cole Mitchell 01/14/08
Your "lullaby" illustrates well how important the first "stitch" is in the life of a child. Your first two stanzas were especially beautiful.
Grace .01/15/08
I love it! I agree the first letter of each line should be capitalized. Though it was beautiful! ;)
Catrina Bradley 01/15/08
This is precious - heart breaking and heart warming both. 2 mothers with good intentions, one who followed through and one who didn't. You showed both sides of this topic. Love it.
Benjamin Graber01/16/08
Beautiful poem, and very sweet.

My only suggestion would be that you add some more imagery, which could make this poem even more beautiful and inspiring...
Joy Faire Stewart01/16/08
The poem is beautiful and so filled with emotion. I love the ending!
Beth LaBuff 01/17/08
What a sweet Lullaby. Your title is perfect. You've captured a mothers concern for her child and written this very well. I love the verse "Train up a child..." and claim it often. Thanks for this beautiful poem.