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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “A Stitch in Time Saves Nine” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/03/08)

TITLE: We, Together
By nicole wian
01/04/08


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We kneel at the bed,
Jesus and Heather,
Coming before the Father,
Praying together.


The Son has taught Heather
How rightly to pray,
The Spirit reminding her
To do it every day.

Tonight is different.
She casts all her cares,
And as the tears start to flow
So also the prayers.

She comes to a point
Where words can’t express,
So the Spirit intercedes,
Making sense of the mess.

Heather feels alone,
Like she can’t go on.
Does anyone understand?
She can’t see the dawn.

Out to God she cries,
“I receive no appreciation,
There’s been no reward
For my supplication.

I pray day and night,
Yet my children barely see me,
My friends still have not sought you
And my husband’s addicted to tv.

I have done my best
As you told me I should
To live my life as a witness,
But it’s done no good.”

“Dear, daughter,” God said,
“I understand your pain,
But, please let me show you,
It has not been in vain.

Each prayer you’ve spoken
Has not gone unheard,
And I honor all the time
You’ve spent in my word.

As for your children,
Though it doesn’t now show,
You’ve built a firm foundation.
They will surely grow.

All your sacrifice,
Teaching them of me,
Just know there will come a day
When it’s me they’ll see.

They will rise up.
They will call you blessed
All because it was my name
That your lips confessed.

Each one of your friends
Counts you their best.
Always, they turn to you first,
Above all the rest.

The reason for this:
In you there’s a light.
You have always encouraged
Them to do what’s right.

Finally, your husband.
He’s lost without you.
I think you and I both know
This to be true.

Each and every day,
I look in his heart.
It grows softer and softer.
You’re doing your part.

One day he’ll love you
The way you desire.
He will even be baptized
With my Holy fire.

Oh, please do not think
I’ve turned a deaf ear
Or have not seen your life
Lived in Godly fear.

Only in Heaven
Will you truly see
If not for your faithfulness,
Where their lives would be.

Listen carefully,
This very hour,
These moments spent on your knees
Releases power.

If it weren’t for you,
Their hearts would be hard,
Lives full of much more misery,
Souls broken and scarred.

You stood in the gap,
Their hearts to be won,
Praying that they would find me,
My will to be done.

I can not recount
How different they are.
Having you to pray for them,
Has changed them by far.

They are not finished
But what joy you will see
As the fruits of your labor
Turn hearts unto me.

I love you daughter,
Am grateful for you.
I never want you to doubt
How much this is true.”

So now feeling spent
And yet strangely still.
The Lord answers. Heather knew
She was in His will.


We wiped our eyes
Jesus and Heather,
Stood up holding hands, promising
To walk this life together.


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Yvonne Blake 01/10/08
What a beautiful poem!
It seemed like I was listening in to a private conversation.Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Some of the metering was irregular, too short or too long, but the rhyming was great.
Keep writing.
Jan Ackerson 01/11/08
Very personal and sweet.

It may be a bit long for this type of poetry--readers sometimes get caught up in the sing-songish rhythm. I like to advise poets to be brief, and if anything, to add more poetic elements: imagery, metaphor, simile for example. Check into a few of those, and see what you can do with your next poem.

I enjoyed "eavesdropping" on this prayer time.
Catrina Bradley 01/12/08
Thank you for sharing this. Often I too wonder when I don't see results in those I pray for. Thanks for this reminder that God does hear and that our time in prayer is not wasted.
Benjamin Graber01/16/08
I really like the thought of approaching Father together with Jesus. Thank you for that.

I would suggest that you add more imagery to this poem, to make it even more encouraging. Let me know if you'd like some help or any tips...