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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Church (12/06/07)

TITLE: Building the Church
By PASTOR SNOOPI BOTTEN
12/13/07


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All across America a request continues to go out,
A request to God and people firmly believe it will come about.
They pray that God will multiply their Church and make it grow.
They want to be the light of Jesus and let the entire world know.
But people look and whisper when someone comes through the door,
They very harshly judge if the person can ever be right with the Lord.
"Come just as you are" is what we say and sing,
Forgetting everyone has a background and oh the baggage they bring.
The new person comes with problems and is met with confrontation,
There is little understanding and no validation.
Anger builds between the two sides,
And the pain of the person just gets repressed inside.
Then with unknown authority the new person is asked to leave,
He'll never fit in or so they believe.
The Church quickly forgets and tries to gain yet more new members,
Yet that one person is lost, hurt, and will always remember.
People today are not letting things out like they did at one time,
They let their pain grow until they engage in a crime.
It's becoming too common when you turn on CNN,
And see the top story as a Church shooting again.
"What can be done" is what people say,
What happened to validation, caring, and taking time to pray?
For rejection even hurt Jesus when God turned His face,
Jesus died to forgive us all by His love and grace.
Jesus never gave up on anyone because He sees who we really are,
And He knows we all can change and His guidance is never far.
So how do we build the Church when new people come in?
We love and accept them no matter where they've been.
We set an example and guide them in a Christian way,
And we keep encouraging them even if they wonder astray.
For A building alone is not the Church and it can't grow,
Until we reach to the world, all are our Brothers and Sisters you know.


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LaNaye Perkins12/16/07
Your entry had a stong message of truth. You show much potential in your writing. A challenge buddy might be a good step to take as you polish your skill.
Joanne Sher 12/16/07
There is much truth in this piece. A bit of work on meter and other poetry mechanics might strengthen it some. Keep writing - I enjoyed this.
Jan Ackerson 12/16/07
There is a lot here for us to think about and to work on.

One thing that might increase the "flow" of this poem is to try for the same number of stressed and unstressed syllables in each line. Some of your lines have this, and then when the meter changes, your readers take a little mental "stumble."

Work on it--you've got important things to say!
Yvonne Blake 12/18/07
A poem! I love poems!
The rhyme is great, but the rhythm was awkward. Maybe if you broke each line into 2 shorter lines,it might have helped the meter.
Good message too.