The Official Writing Challenge
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12/16/07
Good as allegory or cautionary tale--I sincerely believe that the modern church isn't in such deplorable condition! Definitely well-written, and much to think over.
This was good. You got me! I had begun to suspect the visitor was an angel or something, but didn't guess it was Jesus. Very well done.
12/16/07
Interesting! You surprised me at the end. I suggest that you use a little dialogue here and there, to make it more realistic. I like the descriptions.