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12/14/07
Very moving and suspenseful!

Be careful of switching from present to past tense. I think past tense would work best for this type of story.

I love the courage of the man who stood to pray, and inspired the whole church to join in.
12/15/07
This is a good example of God's love. In this paragraph, I assume you meant the pastor, but it wasn't really obvious.
"He is old and his hair white now" I know it's a typo, but I think you meant to say "yelling" instead of "jelling"
This could be made into a good longer story.
Great story idea and descriptions.
Tidy some technical details and WOW!
Very inspiring to stand for love.
12/18/07
Excellent idea - I love the older man's courage to worship in the face of danger.

Spelling and grammatical errors distract from the flow of the story, making it difficult to read. However, the concept is a great one.
01/14/08
Great story here. You should join us on the message boards--we have a lot of fun there. http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/index.php