The Official Writing Challenge
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12/14/07
Lovely poem with great allegorical descriptions. Very nice!
12/14/07
Very good imagery, and a unique rhyme scheme. I found the rhythm a little bit choppy; perhaps punctuation would help it to flow more easily.
12/15/07
A poem! You gave a good description of heaven and the church as a bride.
A lovely poem of service and witness.
One little thing, the last group did not rhyme the fourth lines.
Otherwise, I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for sharing.
12/16/07
I've always liked the image of the church as a "bride adorned". Beautiful poem.
12/21/07
Congratulations, William, on placing 9th in your level.
12/27/07
Imaginative and unique. Work out a few flow issues and this is really good.