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12/14/07
A moving account of persecution of believers...so sad!
12/15/07
Very touching! There are so many in the world who are being hunted and persecuted for the cause of Christ!
I liked this phrase "squeezing out traces of energy still left in his body that was already like a crushed lemon"
Change paragraphs when each new person speaks. It's easier to understand.
This was written as someone who has experienced this.
I could feel the intensity of the situation!
More spacing does help the reader.
Keep writing...you held my attention through the whole piece.
Very moving and stirring. What a beautiful reward awaits those who love Him and especially those murdered in His name.
12/18/07
It's good for Christians, especially in America, to remember that many are still violently persecuted for their faith. Your story makes me reflect on my own faith and ask, "What would I do?"

You may want to refresh yourself on comma usage. Tricky lil' buggers, but they can help some of the sentences flow more smootly (when used properly).