The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/07
What a marvelous experience!
12/10/07
I can see your writing improving every week.
Perhaps you could try a bit more 'showing' instead of 'telling.'
For example, in many of your paragraphs you 'tell' the reader what Sharon and yourself talked about. Try putting those conversations into dialogue form to let the reader see the chats and how they evolve.
Thanks for sharing this wonderful experience :)
12/10/07
*grin* Hearing the same song sung in different languages, at the same time, moves me every time. The bond of Christ reaches across cultural and language barriers--beautiful testimony!
12/11/07
Lovely story. We are so blessed that God meets our needs no matter where we are in the world.
You did a good job of showing how God puts within our hearts a desire to worship with other believers. I felt your gratitude at finding a "home group" away from home.
What a lovely experience. I enjoyed your telling of it, too. A picky item: the comparison word is "than" instead of "then."
12/12/07
Because this world is not our 'home', the sense of 'home' emanates from our friends in Christ--no matter where we are in the world! I can envision your testimony being developed longer with details....perhaps even into a screenplay?! God knows! Thanks for sharing, and God bless you.
What a wonderful testimony you have. This is just beautiful! Keep writing.
12/14/07
Great job on placing sixth in your level, Beckie!