The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/07
I thought it was excellent use of imagery. The only criticism I would have, is that it was a bit stacatto. However, it very much kept the reader on the edge of their seat.
12/06/07
Vivid imagery. I am not entirely convinced that Nazis would bust up a group for the sake of it; so the story did not ring true for me.

Perhaps you could have added another reason for their intervention? The home group was ministering to persecuted Jew for example.
I felt the tension of this moment.
12/14/07
Congratulations on placing 14th in your level!