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12/06/07
What a beautiful story.I loved the fact that the first person reached by Tillie's Homegroup was not a homeless person but someone who could support the groups continued success.
12/06/07
Beautiful, heartfelt story...

I am quite moved by the entire idea, nearly speachless.

A winner in my book...good job...

12/06/07
"trample through your hope garden"...wonderful line...
12/06/07
This is a good story. And very well written!
12/06/07
Very well written. I saw everything clearly and rejoiced that someone (You) finally knows what the church is really all about.
Well written. Keep up the great writing.
12/06/07
WOW!!! what an awsome story! concise and to the point. Excellent job!
12/06/07
This one needs a tissue warning. I couldn't read fast enough to see if they came. Such a clever idea and the story flowed well. Character dialog was great. Good Job!
12/07/07
Great story! You will drew me in... I too, liked the line about the hope garden.
12/08/07
This truly is excellent. Humble Christians. With so much pride abounding, this was nice to read. Would actually love to see this in real life!!
12/08/07
A very strong entry with masterful flashes of brilliance. I didn't plan on reading the whole story, but it kept sucking me in. Very good job. I wish you would have given some visuals for Brewster. Had no idea what he looked like or how old he was. By some of his thoughts in the 1st paragraph I assumed he was a young officer. I also think you had the opportunity to give us more to see about Tillie. With a fuller characterizaion of Tillie and Brewster and a little polishing of some sentence structure this would have been even more outstanding than it is. I look forward to finding out who wrote this. God bless.
12/08/07
Great writing, sweet story. You had me from beginning to end!
12/10/07
You definitely wrapped me up in this story. What a wonderful witness.

You have some good advice above - the only thing I would add is that, personally, I probably would have ended the story with the officer asking to join Tillie's home group. In my opinion, that would be a bit of a stronger finish.

Enjoyed this very much.
12/10/07
Great story! It's almost more of an allegory than a short story, because it may not be particularly realistic--but it works very well on that level; you probably intended it that way! Your writing style is fresh and engaging.
12/10/07
You drew me in and held me. Even though I wondered about the actual feasibility of this I know it Could happen. The bond of Christ Is that strong. Good job!
12/10/07
You developed a very charming character in Tillie. I hope she shows up in more of your stories.

I agree with Joanne. I think you could have ended with the officer asking to join the group -- that's a very strong ending.

Great job with the topic. I really enjoyed reading this.
12/11/07
I absolutely loved your story. Your imagery is excellent, allowing me to "see" the setting. And your message is beautiful.
12/12/07
Excellent job -- excellent story -- it kept my attention all the way through -- and makes me want to find out what happened next!
12/12/07
Not just unique, this is a sweet, captivating story.
12/12/07
This is a beautiful and touching story. Well done.
12/13/07
There's only one word I can think of to describe this story; beautiful. ^-^