The Official Writing Challenge
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11/30/07
Very good writing; one has a real sense of "being there."

Be careful of tense switches from past to present--and I really think a piece this good deserves a more compelling title.

I like the way you put the reader right in your character's head. Well done.
12/03/07
Marvelous story of a miraculous gift of healing! I agree with Jan that a title that jumps off the page would do justice to this exciting story.
12/03/07
Very vivid descriptions - this was quite engaging.