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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Gifts (of the Spirit or service) (11/22/07)

TITLE: night service
By sarah rauch
11/26/07


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The freezing cold! The empty hall,
footsteps echo from the wall,
shaking fingers switch heaters on
wondering where the heat has gone

The teacups rattle, some are chipped
mismatched just a little bit
older saucers wait in line -
but all are cleaned until they shine

The cookies tumble on a plate -
various sizes, varying weight
some are slightly ...darker brown,
but lovingly brought from the town

The seats unstacked, with paint chipped
soon the hall is well equipped
fold out table, tablecloths hide
the splinters on the front and side

The homeless arrive and early too!
most with little else to do,
they shuffle in, and fill each seat
floor dirty with the busy feet

The helpers start their trusty rounds -
tea is hot and coffee ground
the smell of spirits and meths ignored
as orders taken and hot drinks poured.

The biscuits are taken in twos and threes,
laughter started, faces pleased
mistrust warms and fades away
as sunrise signals another day

The helpers mingle, people leave
the warmth felt here a sweet reprieve
the hours passed so connected
leaves no person unaffected

The mismatched cups, the ugly chairs
ignored by those with deeper cares
this humble hall is hallowed ground
for there the truest love was found


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Holly Westefeld11/29/07
I love your images, and the gift of love you so beautifully describe.
The meter, however, could use some work.
Janice Cartwright11/30/07
I like the way your poem brought to light how little physical appointments matter. Love covers a multitude.
Jan Ackerson 11/30/07
What a lovely, serene poem. Loved the calming rhythm and unforced rhymes.
Joanne Sher 12/01/07
Wonderful images here - I could picture this very vividly. I truly enjoyed this piece. You put me right in the middle of this scene and made me feel for everyone involved.

I tripped up on the meter a couple places, but it may have just been me.

Wonderfully done - you blessed me today.
Peter Stone12/07/07
Congrats on your placing. This is a beautiful article. At first I thought a church being prepared, but was delighted to see it was feeding the homeless.
Betty Overstreet12/09/07
I love the pictures you painted for us! So true to life, so vividly described. Keep up the wonderful work.