The Official Writing Challenge
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11/23/07
Lovely story. Well written and very moving.
11/25/07
You showed your MC's vulnerability very well. You did a good job telling the story. -- Laury
11/28/07
I really liked reading this!
Very moving story. It literally had me in tears to feel the lose of Jeffery and Ray, but also our Heavenly Father for our salvation. Thank you.
Very good writing here... the MCs pain really comes through - and the story of the boy and his dog almost had me in tears. Great job.
11/28/07
I loved your dialogue. I could hear their voices. You've written a beautiful story
You did a good job of showing your preacher's sadness, as well as the comfort form an unconventional source.
11/28/07
This took my emotions on a ride. VERY well-written.
11/29/07
Those very words spoken by little Jeffery, were the ones God whispered to MY broken heart when my husband died at a young age. It is comforting to know that God had a broken heart, too, when His son died on the cross. He gave so much, so we could be reunited with our loved ones some day, and death would not have victory over the believer. Good story that resonates with truth.