The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a well-written retelling of the Biblical story. Good work.
Very interesting story that's nicely crafted. I really wanted to read more! This would be a great expended story, as well.
Excellent concept. One of my favorite Biblical accounts. I would have liked it more if you would have included the words: Jerusalem and walls in your opening sentence. But, that is just me. Great entry on encouragement. God bless.
I have always liked this story in the Bible. You brought it to life really well.
Very evocative writing. This was definitely engaging. My only suggestion is to lighten up on the exclamation points - use strong words instead. Love the voice of this.