The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/07
This is a well-written retelling of the Biblical story. Good work.
11/19/07
Very interesting story that's nicely crafted. I really wanted to read more! This would be a great expended story, as well.
11/21/07
Excellent concept. One of my favorite Biblical accounts. I would have liked it more if you would have included the words: Jerusalem and walls in your opening sentence. But, that is just me. Great entry on encouragement. God bless.
I have always liked this story in the Bible. You brought it to life really well.
11/22/07
Very evocative writing. This was definitely engaging. My only suggestion is to lighten up on the exclamation points - use strong words instead. Love the voice of this.