The Official Writing Challenge
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I thought this was well written. You stuck to your main point throughout, and had a very good conclusion that tied it all up neatly.

You have written a beautiful analogy. I love it when God reveals concepts like that to us! Having an idea about how things work in God's Kingdom by revelation is wonderful, isn't it? When God shows us the way it is, it sticks with us forever.
11/14/07
Excellent, tight writing with a wonderful analogy. I thoroughly enjoy analogies and marvel at how God reveals His work in this world through every day occurences. Only one suggestion would be to delete the exclamation points. They are not necessary to your story and at times can be distracting. This is a very minor point. Otherwise, I was truly blessed. I look forward to reading your work again sometime.
Nicely done! I love this analogy.
Too often, I fear, no matter how much I love that sweet aroma, I am found in the playroom, leaving most of the baking in Mom's hands, missing the blessing of partnership.