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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Evangelism (11/01/07)

TITLE: Park Angel
By Deborah Caruso


As Caroline climbed out from under her cozy blanket, her Yorkie greeted her with kisses. As she petted her, the city park came to her mind. She felt the need to go there, to be near those who Christ died for, as she did many times before. She had read how Jesus was despised and rejected of men; a man of sorrows, and acquainted with grief. These people in the park were also despised and rejected of men; no one wanted them in the park. But unlike her Savior, some of them, had no doubt, brought their troubles upon themselves; at least that was the opinion of many that she knew.

Last night there had been a frost, and she was glad that all her precious flowers had been covered up. She thought to herself, ‘My flowers were probably warmer last night than the poor souls in the park’. After waffles and juice, she put on a warm sweater, grabbed her favorite book and headed out to the park.

She soon ran into Megan.

“Are you going to that park again?” Her neighbor smugly asked.


“Why on earth do you go there all the time? Don’t you have any thing better to do with your time? Those people could care less if you show up or not. You know what the bible says; God helps those that help themselves.”

“I don’t think it actually says that.” Caroline replied.

“Well it says something like that. You just watch out for yourself there.”

“I will.” Caroline answered.

As Caroline entered the park, she sat down on a bench by the fountain. The air was still cool, so the sun felt good on her face; she began to read. Shortly, a young girl in tattered clothes joined her.

“Where do you live?” The girl asked.

“About two miles away.”

“In a nice house?”

“Pretty nice.”

“You smell good!”

“Thank you!”

“Isn’t the fountain pretty?”

“Yes it is.”

“I love the noise the water makes. It makes me feel all quiet inside.”

“It is soothing.” Caroline remarked.

Nearing the fountain, the girl said, “Sometimes I just want to jump right in, but that’s not allowed. I would be a lot cleaner if they’d just let me jump in.”

“Water is good for that, but it’s too cold to be jumping in today. What’s your name?” Caroline asked.

“Deidre, but they call me Dee.”

“Dee, there is a water that the bible talks about that will not only quiet you inside, but it will also give you a good bath!”

“Where is that water? We could all use some of that water!” She said looking around. “Hey, wait a minute, you’re gonna tell me about Jesus, aren’t you?”

“Why yes, do you know Him?”

“I’ve heard about Him, but what does Jesus have to do with that water?”

“When He fixes your heart, it will become like a fountain.”

“Like this one?” Dee asked.

“No, it’s a fountain that you can’t see or touch, but you always know it’s there; out of it pours forth good things from God for our lives. It also gives us eternal life.” Caroline explained.

“Live forever? I don’t know if that’s a good idea. I have a hard enough time as it is. I don’t think I want to live like this forever.”

“But if you have Jesus, you won’t have to live like this.”

Looking down, Dee asked, No one wants me, are you sure He will?”

“I’m sure, let’s pray.”

After Dee asked Jesus in her heart, they headed towards the downtown mission.

“There are many people here that know Jesus too.” Said Caroline.

“These people give us food and a place to sleep and clothes. They try to help us get jobs and houses too. I have never been able to do that, because of my habit.” Dee confessed.

“Jesus is with you now. He will help you throw that old habit away.”

“He can do that? Here Jesus, take this, and throw it away!” She said as if throwing.
She then hugged Caroline and said, “I don’t feel much different, but somehow I know it’s gone, just like you said. Miss Caroline, I’m glad you visited the park today.”

“Me too!”

As Caroline returned home, she noticed that her mother’s driver was parked in front.

“Hey Charles, are you picking up mother?” She asked

“Yes, Miss Caroline, your mother is going to have lunch with the ladies today.”

“That’s nice.”

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Anothervoice Sunstar11/09/07
Good contrast between the main character's home setting and the park setting. Smooth transition of the "waters".
Marty Wellington 11/14/07
Good dialogue and story. The last part about Caroline's mother doesn't really add to your story so I'd end it with "Me, too!" Otherwise, nicely done. Keep up the good work. Blessings~