The Official Writing Challenge
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Well, I just fell in love with Kelsey after reading this sweet piece!

A few confusing moments--were the opening few sentences in Nigeria, or the US? And I wasn't clear on the narrator's relationship to Kelsey. The narrator used "Mom" and "Dad" as if they were his/her own parents--was Kelsey a sister? But I don't think so...I just wasn't sure.

Great title, by the way.
Love the first paragraph. I could picture the old building. Your MC was charming. Nice conclusion.
I fell in love with your MC and her dedication to the leading of the Lord. Keep writing!