The Official Writing Challenge
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11/02/07
Cute story--I wish you had expanded on it even more. You probably had 500 words left to develop this story--help us get to know Miss Debbie and the little girl as real people rather than characters who perform actions in a story.

This is a great start--I urge you to run with it.
11/05/07
Good illustration. Miss Debbie would have done well to write a good-sized cheque out to show her class that giving is in keeping with earning. Well done.
11/07/07
cute story. I agree with the others, I would like to know more about the teacher, the students and a little more detail. Keep writing!
~Amy
11/07/07
This was really cute, some expasion would be nice. Overall good writing, good point!