The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/07
Nicely organized essay/devotional and just the right length. A personal experience would move it up a notch for reader involvement. Thanks for the positive viewpoint and for sharing your thoughts.
11/01/07
Concise writing supporting your stance that Sunday School is needed. Could, possibly, leave out the first paragraph? - I lost track of the character, Sandra.
11/03/07
Well-written. I would have liked to read more about Sandra; the first paragraph was very compelling.
11/07/07
Good concepts here, short and to the point. Some of your senteces could have been linked together to make it seem less "choppy" but overall this was a great piece! Keep sharing your writing.