The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/07
Refreshing and to the point. My favorite so far.
11/01/07
Super tie-in from the opening to the finish with the same phrase of "come and see if you think it's the same". Really good attack on this topic.
11/02/07
Very nice!

I especially liked that Margaret and Opal's class wasn't just a social club. It equiped them for SERVICE.

I felt like I knew the ladies in the story. I loved visiting the new class through Opal's eyes. Good job.
11/03/07
I liked the fact that your character came full circle--from invited to invitee.

I don't think you need the *** between most sections. Since there is not a great deal of time that passes between those sections, a simple transitional phrase would do, and will be less distracting for your reader. Your writing is definitely up to the task of informing your reader when there's a slight change of scene.

Very nice entry.
11/05/07
Just excellent, and I love you Opal passed on what she had experienced just as Margaret had passed it on to her.
11/06/07
Your title is just GREAT! And I love your ending--the way it moves down to simplicity after building the content in the middle. WONderful piece! It could be in a "class" by another name than "beginners."
11/07/07
This was wonderful piece. It flowed nicely and the suggestion of the cycle continuing at the end was perfect. Good job!
11/07/07
Good title, wonderful ending. This held my attention throughout. Very nicely done.
11/07/07
I like how you really showed the difference between just a "rote" Sunday School class and a worshipful, caring Sunday School class.
11/07/07
This is really good. I have been in both types of "Sunday schools", and you nailed it perfectly. I especially like the part about the sermon at the MC's original church -- it made me chuckle because that's what I grew up in.

This is a very strong beginner's entry -- my favorite so far. Nice job.