The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/07
A great story to share with teens--even Christian teens have trouble going outside the safety of their own cliques.

I felt that there was too much introductory material--by the time we got to the real conflict--the new girl--the story was almost over. I'd love to see this re-worked so that we get to know both girl's personalities a bit better.

Nice writing, and an important message.
10/21/07
I agree that your main character made a wonderful choice that perfectly illustrates true fellowship. This is a good beginning, and I hope you will someday write the rest of the story