The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/07
Wow. You sent chills through me several times. What a wonderful testimony.
10/20/07
What a marvelous testimony! Thanks for sharing it.

You used several phrases that are in common usage: time stood still...Olivia was His, not mine...glued to her bedside...if these are phrases that you have heard before, your reader has heard them, too. Look for fresh ways to express those events, and your writing will stand out.
10/20/07
Wow. Glad there was a happy ending!
10/21/07
I felt as though I was right there with you; joined in the fellowship of prayer for your precious child. What a wonderful testimony of God's healing Power!