The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/07
One of the best Biblical metaphors, and you expanded it well.

A few suggestions: Take a look at your first sentence, which contains a grammatical error. You want your first sentence to really grab your readers, not to confuse them. And you may wish to combine some of your single-sentence paragraphs into larger ones of 3-6 sentences, to improve the flow of the piece. Finally, give it a thorough reading for little errors.

This is a great message for the Body to heed--thank you.
10/21/07
You did a wonderful job getting your point across - a bit of more focus on grammar would make this piece even better. Thanks for writing!
10/22/07
You connected things well in concepts here. I too was a bit put off by the first sentence but after that it all made sense. Don't be rushed into your entries, it pays to read and reread and read again outloud to see if it all makes sense. (a lesson I am slowly learning)Keep up the blessed writing, it all makes perfect sense when it's written with God.