The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/07
This is a really neat story about fellowship. I would have loved to hear more detail about Jillian and her friends--a little more character development--but still a sweet piece.
10/20/07
Nice use of present tense.

I'd love to know more about Jillian and her group--perhaps to eavesdrop on one of their meetings, complete with dialogue and action?

This is a sweet beginning--I urge you to expand it!
10/22/07
Very neat way to tell a story. Great writing!