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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fellowship (among believers) (10/11/07)

TITLE: Life in the Bowl
By Beckie Stewart
10/13/07


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A familiar struggle among families of pastors is feeling like their lives are lived in a fish bowl. They fear the church and community scrutinizes every move they make. They wonder whether they can safely swim within this poisonous habitat. What makes this an unhealthy environment?

A similar occurrence in all aquariums is the growing of algae. Algae develops due to the presence of sun and nutrients (nitrates). The increase of nitrates causes the water to become toxic to the fish. Fresh water is the cure.

The toxins had reached dangerous levels within our fish bowl. With an excess of seventy resumes mailed over a six month period, we desperately begged the Lord to transfer our family to a new tank. Much to our dismay we were lifted by the nets and seriously considered by a number of churches only to be dumped back into our present living conditions. It became apparent that a new domain was not on our horizon. How were we to continue and survive where we existed now?

We arrived at the pastor/wife conference seeking answers. We gathered with seven other couples from all over the country, discovering other fish just as "icky" as us. We began our exploration with these school mates for a new perspective.

Amid our free times, we learned about each others guppies. During our daily feedings, we rose to the surface and released our burdens. In our group times we sang praises, lifted one another up in prayer, and heard the Word of God taught to us.

One particular night we sat under a prayer shawl and had encouraging words spoken to us. Each of these marina friends prayed over us and then anointed us with oil. A healing generated hope within us, and our spirits were lifted.

Another evening we watched a short film revealing how difficult it was for the butterfly to emerge from a cocoon. We learned that if anything interferred and shorten the process, the butterfly would be killed. We understood that if we attempted to escape the vessel in which we dwelt, we would disrupted the Lord's plan.

As we swam beside one another that week, it became apparent to all of us that we had indeed received fresh water. We found our gills soothed with clean air again. The nitrates had lost their toxic effects and we no longer floundered in fears and doubts. We had been renewed and refreshed. We could breath and swim again.


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LauraLee Shaw10/19/07
Neat illustration. I will remember this.
Jan Ackerson 10/20/07
Wonderful extended metaphor!
Brenda Welc10/22/07
What a great analogy. We as Christian sure feel this way. Sometimes I find myself just pounding my head on the side of the bowl!!! Great writing, well done!
Deborah Engle 10/23/07
I noticed a few grammatical errors that could be remedied by a little proof reading, but I enjoyed your story. I'm not in the ministry, but all Christians experience these pressures at one time or another. It's good to be able to indulge in a conference or seminar that will renew our spiits. Very good.
Joanne Sher 10/23/07
Very creative extended metaphor - enjoyed how central it was to your point. Good stuff!
Kristen Hester 10/23/07
You communicate your feelings very well here. I got a very good word picture of what your family is going through.

You asked for tips. One thing I would suggest is to make your first sentence simple and strong. Perhpas you could say: "Families in Ministry and Fish have a lot in common." Or "Many Pastors and their families feel like they are living in a fish bowl." Sometimes shorter sentences can help clarify your message. I think you need a mix of long and short sentences.

Like I said, you are a good communicator. Good job!
Dee Yoder 10/24/07
It's clever to put the word "icky" in there! Anyone with an aquarium knows that fish get a disease called "ick". You were able to have that theme flow effectively through the article. I agree; a little fresh water is good for the spirit!
Janice Cartwright10/24/07
I'm familiar with what the toxic effects of what fish-bowl pastorates can do to a marriage and a family. I think pastors and their wives need to take time out often (especially in surroundings where they can be alone with God and His creation) to replenish and refresh both their spirits and their marriages. Thanks for writing this and addressing an often neglected aspect of fellowship.
Betty Castleberry10/24/07
Love the analogy drawn here. This was unique and a fun read. Good work.
Laury Hubrich 02/24/08
I love this analogy. This is very good writing and I feel I've gotten to know you better through this piece. Keep on writing!
Laury


   
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