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I did not expect the twist at the end. It was a powerful story and it made me sad that the friendship ended. I think the ending would have been stronger if you would have ended with "mansion." Just my two cents. Great job!
This gave me goosebumps! What an unexpected tragedy to read at the end of the story. Very realistic viewpoint of fellowship and community.
Beautifully written, so poignant and touching.

I paused a bit at inviting her to sit in the chair that you had in your arms. You'd have to be very strong! LOL, an easy edit--either just have her sit, or put the chair down...

That's a minor nitpick for a very strong and moving entry.
This was very good and also a good reminder to keep reaching out to others.
There is so much here I wish you had more word count to work with. Tragic ending, I was moved. You gripped my attention in the begin and I gasped in shock as the events unfolded. Great writing.
Really enjoyed from beginning to end and was quite captivated by the reality of this story.
A very moving story with a terribly sad ending. The story touched me and it was a wonderful picture of a special friendship.