The Official Writing Challenge
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09/23/07
This was good. The rhyme scheme worked well.

Some lines didn't fit the rhythm, however, especially some of the longer ones. I'd also suggest putting an extra line of space ever 2 or 4 lines in a poem like this.

I loved they pictures you painted in this poem. Great job. Keep writing!
How sweet!
09/26/07
I love poetry! You do have some great rhyming words: "question/suggestion" and "trudge/nudge" come to mind. I really like your title too.