The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice story. Good twist at the end. The suspence could have been built up a bit more and held a bit longer. Didn't expect the ending.
Oh! Good suspenseful writing. I think you did great with descriptions of the evening (rainy, dark) and the neighbor (shadowy, hat brim dripping rain, smoking, and coughing). I was worried for Calvin.