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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)

TITLE: Missing The Call
By Clarence (Sonny) White
09/20/07


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A lit cigarette hissed angerly as it skipped across the wet ground finally spewing to a stop in a large puddle.Stupid rain! Two days now continually without stopping, rain.

Calvin strained his eyes trying to make out the dark shadowy figure under a tree across the street. Water dripping from the brim of his hat made it difficult, if not impossible.

A cough broke the long silence, followed by a series of coughs. Calvin smiled to himself and thought, smoke another one you turkey. He remembered how God had delivered him from smoking just a few short years ago. He had been getting to a point where he coughed uncontrollably at times himself. Probably would have been dead by now if he would have kept it up.

His mind turned back to the shadowy figure across the street. He gripped his cell phone tighter and wondered if he could hit the speed dial number for the police when the time came.

The neighborhood watch thing had sounded good when the neighbors on the block had discussed it about a year ago. He only attended about half of the meetings and wondered if there might have been something he missed. Let’s see now, wait until he looks like he’s going to break in and don’t try to restrain him yourself. Try to remember what he looks like and call the police.

But who would have though there would have been a couple of breakins and assualts on women in the neighborhood within the past month. It had been so peaceful and quite. Now everyone was uptight and no one ventured out after dark anymore.

The figure lit up another cigarette and Calvin tried to get a better look as the flame reflected the figures face. A twig snapped under Calvin’s foot as he tried to move a little closer.

“Cal, Cal is that you “? Calvin recognized his neighbor Brian James who lived across the street. “ I was so glad when the police called saying they caught the creep I came outside to take my last smoke of the night. “Darn tree didn’t keep much rain off tho”.

Calvin smiled remembering the phone call he had missed while in the bathroom before taking his watch outside. He knew he should have checked the caller ID but probably some salesman.

He said a silent prayer to God that it was finally over and now peace and calm again.


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Sharon Henderson09/23/07
Nice story. Good twist at the end. The suspence could have been built up a bit more and held a bit longer. Didn't expect the ending.
Beth LaBuff 09/26/07
Oh! Good suspenseful writing. I think you did great with descriptions of the evening (rainy, dark) and the neighbor (shadowy, hat brim dripping rain, smoking, and coughing). I was worried for Calvin.