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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Calm (emotionally) (09/13/07)

TITLE: Five Nights, Five Cities
By Sharon Henderson
09/19/07


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Monday night. Miami Florida. Downtown.
As we explored the city we looked around
Then we heard Pop! Pop! What a sound!
We realized that terror did abound.

Back in my room I prayed forewarning
and "there I calmed myself until morning."*

Tuesday night. Denver Colorado. Suburbia.
The movie theater is showing “Disturbia”
The weather here is as cold as Serbia
Ice on the road warns the media.

Back in my room I prayed forewarning
and "there I calmed myself until morning."*

Wednesday night. Dallas Texas. Freeways.
The roads have tolls so, yes, we pay.
OH MY! That car’s headed the wrong way.
I saw someone die in a crash today.

Back in my room I prayed forewarning
and "there I calmed myself until morning."*

Thursday night. Las Vegas Nevada. Casino.
Everyone else does, so we go.
The money moves fast but we move slow
My purse is stolen on the very last row.

Back in my room I prayed forewarning
and "there I calmed myself until morning."*

Friday night. My Town USA. Hospital.
“The baby is coming” was the call.
She enters the world and lets out a bawl.
Now…I can smile…after all

Back in my room I prayed ... adorning
and "there I calmed myself until morning."*



*Isaiah 38:13a (English Standard Version)


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Kristen Hester 09/22/07
I am not a poet by any stretch of the imagination, but I really, really liked this. Very clever and creative. It kept my attention. I loved the repetition. Great job.

I think there should be a comman between the cities and states. (example: Dallas, Texas) Sorry if you already know this and did it like that for a reason.
Jan Ackerson 09/24/07
Sorry it took me so long to get to this--your e-mail went to my work address and I didn't find it until this morning.

I love the content of this poem, and the parallel structure of the stanzas. There are some problems with forced rhyme and irregular meter--if I remember (feel free to e-mail me), I'll send you some tips on that this afternoon.
Beth LaBuff 09/26/07
Neat thoughts as you've taken us to many major cities in the US. You finished off with a baby's birth...definitely a time to try to stay calm. Thanks! I enjoy reading poetry.


   
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