The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a VERY creative piece - I just love it.
A bit more concentration on grammar and punctuation would make this piece more polished.
I love how you open and close with the box. Wonderful.
Good stuff! I would love to go to the place you described; I'll have to work on that. ;-) This piece fits this week's topic perfectly, and I love the sentence "shining streams of a billion stars." Beautiful!
Extremely gutsy! You make it work well. I loved the two mediums intertwined. It changed the pace of the writing. I also enjoyed your descriptions. A very creative piece indeed!
Great! Love the casual, conversational voice. The beginning and ending are wonderful bookends.
Creative and enjoyable to read. I love the references to the box at the beginning and the end.
This is definitely a keeper! VEry creative and I loved the voice. Of course we had toi be in the center of God's grace ... but I would have never thought to write about that, but You did! Hope this does well. You have talent!
Congratulations on your highly commended. Your descriptions of God's grace are very comforting. Good writing.
I loved the organization and writing, as well as the message of your entty.
Fascinating and enjoyable journey you took us on. You could build on that using other metaphors to make new take on Pilgrim's Progress.
Just watch out for the Grammar Gestapo (or rather, the Punctuation Police) along the way.
Thanks for all the times you've read my articles too.