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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Surprised (09/06/07)

TITLE: The Crusade That Began at Midnight
By Julie Ruspoli


Endless days upon this earth,
Yearning thoughts of pending birth,
Shall God bless us with a son or daughter?

Midnight pains begin the crusade,
Very quickly appears our Jade,
My husband smiles, “It’s another daughter.”

With brunette hair and blue-green eyes,
Our second child grows and thrives,
An independent spirit has this daughter.

She learns to walk just like the other,
But differences astonish her mother,
What diversity is found in this daughter.

Days are filled with walks and school,
She loves to play April fools,
What a sense of humor has this daughter.

Colors are an important matter,
One at a time, and do not splatter,
Hues are very crucial to this daughter.

Her love of music then appears,
She marches as a Pioneer,
Cheers show my gladness with this daughter.

Although shy while very young,
Through drama class an actress is sprung,
Lord what a change was made in this daughter.

A lovely lady she becomes,
Nights are spent consoling chums,
Such an amazing someone is this daughter.

She turns to God through many years,
Even sharing with her peer’s,
God is working through his special daughter.

Searching for a career to sustain,
Many decisions do remain,
Lord continue your guidance for this daughter.

As I watch her life unfold,
Constantly I do behold,
Another astounding day with this daughter.

What shall her future now impart,
Most certainly will impact a heart,
Thank you God for this reverent daughter.

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Jan Ackerson 09/13/07
What a nice tribute to Jade--I hope you share this with her!

A few forced rhymes here and there, and your title, although it picks up on one of the stanzas, doesn't really seem to match the piece.

I feel as if I know Jade after reading this sweet poem.
Laury Hubrich 09/15/07
This is a nice tribute to your daughter. She sounds very special!
Catrina Bradley 09/17/07
Nice flow and rhythm. I like the repeated "daughter" at the end of each stanza. The "beat" was a little off in a couple of the lines, making me stumble - but you wrote a very descriptive portrait of your daughter's life and your crusade. :)
Dee Yoder 09/17/07
Lovely tribute to your daughter. She'll cherish this always, I'm sure, and think about your joy and pride in her through her coming years! That's a beautiful present from a mother to her daughter.
Ebony Broussard09/18/07
I really enjoyed your tribute! It made me think of all that is ahead for me and my daughter. It also blessed me to know that you can "train a child up" in this culture and the child still seek the Lord for herself. Thanks for that affirmation! Ditto on the comments/critique of the others. I hope you will share this with your daughter too!!
Joanne Sher 09/18/07
You gave me some wonderfully vivid images of your daughter - and I like the rhyme of this piece. A bit of work on the meter and this lovely piece would be even more so.
Beth LaBuff 09/19/07
Neat, neat thoughts about your daughter. I like your format and repitition of the word "daughter".

I thought this rhyme was especially good, "What shall her future now impart, Most certainly will impact a heart,"
Kristen Hester09/19/07
Very nice. I,too, feel like I know Jade. I know she will treasure this poem always. Blessings!
Betty Castleberry09/19/07
What a nice heartfelt poem. You sound very proud, as you should be of such a wonderful daughter. Very nicely done.