The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/07
Your writing is very good, with great flow, word choices, and a really authentic sense of time and place.

But...if I weren't already familiar with this story, I'd be totally lost. I think you assume the reader knows the character's names, the details of the vow, etc., but I had to read 3/4 of the story before I figured out what I was reading.

Really fine writing style, this piece has superb potential.
09/17/07
Very good writing. You told a sad tale with great description and characterization of the MC.
09/17/07
Great writing, your flow and wording is excellent. It was so gripping! but I do think you could add more details about the vow more when you talk about it. I was enthralled and caught up in this wonderful retelling! A great choice for Surprised.
09/18/07
Excellent descriptions, and very engaging. You have gotten some good advice, and I really don't have anything else to add. You did a wonderful job with your word choices. Very vivid.
09/21/07
Congratulations Ebony. Your entry has placed 15th in Level 1. With all the Level 1 entries, that is really quite an accomplishment. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall is available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.