The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet story. Thanks!

If you space your quotes, each person getting his own line, it would be easier to read.
This was nice pacing as the attitude change with the brother was very natural and well done.
Sweet story--good for a Sunday School class of upper elementary or young teen students. I like the sticky fingers at the end. Nice touch.
Congratulations Karen. Your entry has placed 10th in Level 1. With all the Level 1 entries, that is really quite an accomplishment. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall is available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.