The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/07
Really like the symbolism here.

Watch your dialog tags--you use "replied" several times. Experiment, perhaps, with tagless dialog to give your writing a more polished look.

Really appealing story!
I liked the idea here. I could feel it: trying and trying to wipe off the smudges, never to succeed until we are washed by the blood of Jesus. Great word picture.
09/12/07
I like the excitement of Julia. If she were a real person, I could see her becoming an important representative of the Lord in her workplace! I like the characters in your story. The dialog seems pretty realistic, too.