The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/07
Nice allegory, and a Scripture I've not often read.

I don't think you need both bold and italics for the worker's thoughts. Just italics should do the trick. And a quick venture into past tense at the end threw me for a moment.

I felt the combination of panic and trust right along with this guy--well done.
09/09/07
You have some excellent spiritual lessons in this well thought-out piece. You've done very well with your writing! This is very creative.