The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent. The depiction of the father's insistence on "no-one needs to know our business" is right on...exactly what an aggressor would say to maintain control, isolate the players, and keep the "game" going. Sad, sad. The character is lucky to have a grandma, and we are all BLESSED to have God who never leaves us nor forsakes us.
Sad story, but kindles the hope of the love that we have from our Father in heaven Reminds me of the scripture..even if mother and father forsake, I will not forsake you. Thanks.
09/13/07
So sad. Glad you ended it with hope. Congrats on your placing!
Very realistic in view - not pleading for sympathy, angry, etc. Nice that you admitted "he was on time" sometimes - shows objectivity even in an emotional writing. Also, shows the character's continued openness toward forgiveness to dad. Many times best writings come from difficult experiences. Good job.
I enjoyed both, your story and the message.