The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/07
A very sweet little story. The song the kids sang was cute. I would recommend putting a space between your paragraphs for more readability.
If you put in lots of space between your paragraphs,as well as your dialogue lines, it would be easier to read. Good flow of conversation between the two brother stars. You give the story an easy flow with your use of dialogue. I had a little trouble seeing where the bold theme fit in, but that could just be me. Keep sharing.
This is a very cute story. Good job. It would be so much fun to see it with pictures of glittering stars.

Everytime you change speakers, start a new pararaph. In this format, it's best to skip lines between paragraphs. Indents don't work like in standard, school writing.

Good job! Keep writing.