The Official Writing Challenge
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Precious story. There is nothing like the feeling of using God-given gifts. He always rewards us when we do. Good representation of satan creeping in just when a big break is about to occur, "Maybe mom was right..." The humility of the mother at the end is encouraging and proof that the Lord does change hearts.
This was such a delightful read. You articulated Maria's thoughts and concerns extremely well, and I enjoyed reading the background on Maria's family.

Make sure to start a new paragraph each time you have a different speaker; that will also help spread your lines out a bit and keep from any confusion.

Very well done! Good luck!
I love this story of dreams fulfilled. It was well written--you're no beginner-- and it held my interest all the way. I'm so glad it had a happy ending. Blessings on you.