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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fearful (08/23/07)

TITLE: Wobbly Walking and Goo-Goo Talking
By Julie Ruspoli
08/29/07


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As I gaze upon my daughter,
I recall days upon the alter,
Praying for her life to be sustained.

From wobbly walking and goo-goo talking,
To hide and seek games that include stalking,
Many hours spent with God to keep her safe.

Her first day when she started school,
She patiently learned every rule,
God keep her safe while she is away.

Then a sleepy bus ride home,
Iím left to wander, search and roam,
Dear God help me find her very soon.

A special Sunday night in class,
She accepts salvation now at last,
Thank you God for making her your own.

Off to highschool then she goes,
A football game with friends she knows,
Lord help her make decisions that are righteous.

Next itís time to learn to drive,
This makes her ego come alive,
God keep us safe until she is a pro.

My darling daughter has a job,
I go take pictures as I sob,
Her daily fate so heavy on my mind.

Career choices can be diverse,
She finally decides to be a nurse,
God with your help I know sheíll make it through.

As I look towards future days,
I pray her life reveals His gaze,
May she remember God is near, all the time.

Although I raised my child, I do not feel mature,
The days went by so quickly, this be sure,
Remember, only with God's help did we endure.


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Allison Egley 08/31/07
Oh, this was great. I especially loved the title.

The last stanza didn't fit the rhythm as well as the rest of the stanzas.

I loved the structure of this, and how the last lines formed a "life long" prayer. Great job.
Rhonda Clark 09/01/07
A very nice poem. It reads easily and flows wonderfully. The meter is good.

Fantastic job.
dub W09/03/07
Loved the title. Hope you meant "altar" in the first verse. Melodic meter, very easy to read. Welcome to the puppy pen.
Larry Amon09/03/07
I liked it. Especially the title too!
Dee Yoder 09/03/07
Every time I read one of your poems I get misty eyed-especially the ones about the growing up years of children! You have a way with the mom's heart; you're able to put into words what so many moms feel about their children!
George Parler 09/05/07
Very nice. A couple of small things, already mentioned by others, but none of which distract from the beauty of this piece.

I loved this stanza. . .
"A special Sunday night in class,
She accepts salvation now at last,
Thank you God for making her your own."
It should be every parent's hope. Tragically that isn't always the case.
Jacquelyn Horne09/05/07
Enjoyed watching your daughter grow up. Just on thing, "alter" used this way should be "altar". But no matter what you call it, keep kneeling there.
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/05/07
Julie, This is my favorite of yours so far. I can so identify having been fearful and having prayed for a son and daughter. Now I'm praying for my grandchildren, too. You did a great job with this.