The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/07
This was very creative.

I was a bit confused though. If this was to represent the 2nd coming, I don't think anyone would know what it was until after it happened. I was also confused as whether he gave his literal property away, or whether it was more of a "mindset" he gave away.

Overall, great story.
09/01/07
This is an interesting story that kept me hooked and reading.

I was confused about the meaning, too. Also, you may want to add spaces in between your paragraphs. It's tough getting used to the format here at the challenge.

Great job.
09/03/07
Yes a bit confusing, but the painted picture which comes from you words is awesome! Keep up the good work.