The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/07
Oh, this is great. I love how you described the fruit as something OTHER than an apple. :) It seems we are in the "same boat" in believing that fruit is no longer around, but who knows?

The only suggestion I have would be to attach "Eve fled" to the paragraph below it. It doesn't need to be a separate paragraph, but it works that way too, so it's really up to you.

Great job in taking us beyond the story a bit. Keep writing.
09/03/07
Interesting perception to the daily life of Adam and Eve. Maybe a little too strong for my liking but very well written. Very descriptive writing; painted a nice picture of the situation for the reader! Keep up the good work.
09/07/07
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