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08/31/07
Nicely done! I relate to the subject matter as well. We need to remember those tender moments we have with our parents in their later years and be blessed for each day we had with them.
09/01/07
This is very nice. You conversation flowed easily.

You may want to watch point of view changes.(This plagues many of us.) Don't want to confuse your reader.

Great job.
09/03/07
My box of kleenex is getting low. I have the same type of relationship with my dad and I was so happy to see you called him daddy! I was laughed at the other day because I am 37 and I should not be calling my father, daddy! This story really touched my heart. Great writing. I was there with you. God bless!
awww.. sif.. sif... it reminded me of my grandfather... Great work! 5 stars for you! :) tnx for sharing!
09/05/07
Very nice piece! I really enjoyed your excellent characterizations of Janette and Bill. They are both people I'd like to know! Bill's wise, comforting words to his daughter were a blessing to me as well! Good writing! :)