The Official Writing Challenge
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09/01/07
Very touching. I know a policeman who was in Iraq doing just what this man was doing.

You have a great article, but need a little more feeling in it. More showing.

Good job.
09/03/07
Good writing. Your story gripped my heart and seemed very real. I can't begin to imagine being in such a circumstance but you showed how God's Word springs to aid us in any time of need. My heart and prayers are with our soldiers and trainers in Iraq--they are the best! Blessings to you.
09/03/07
Thank you for sharing an experience of having the fear of death so real it could be sensed all around yet knowing that no earthly thing can harm our souls and that God's Word is the conquerer of fear.

You drew the reader in well and kept him there. The descriptions of emotions and actions were well presented.

If this was a personal story I say, "Thank you for serving".

God bless and keep writing,

VN veteran, '70-71
09/03/07
Ya know, I just cannot imagine the sacrafices of people such as yourself. I pray for God's protection over all the armed forces everywhere! Oh! Back to your story. This was very well written and kept my attention. God blesses your writing--keep it up!
This was a very well written story. I want to know the very end. Keep on writing.

Semper Fi
09/04/07
Well written. Good descriptions. Good flow. I would like to find out how it ends.
Well done! Your writing is superb and certainly doesn't belong in the beginner's class. Hope to see you move up soon. Great story.
09/07/07
Greetings

Thank you so very much for sharing so much of yourself with us here in this place. I have never been in the military, yet have many family members who have, and I have a friend who was a Marine for twenty years. Words cannot really express what you all mean to me, and to so many others like me. I thank you, I pray God's blessings and protection upon you and your family. Continue to stand upon the faith that God will give you...for the journey/For The Marine.

...Jaunda
Blessings...