The Official Writing Challenge
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08/24/07
You have some good detail in here. Maybe expanding on it in separate paragraphs would make this piece flow a bit better. Your examples are good - maybe this piece would benefit from a bit more explanation and connecting. Keep writing!
08/24/07
You have a PERFECT example of "confused" here with Mary (one I hadn't even considered) about how confused she was when the angel came to her AND especially that she would be with child before she was married. Those are excellent thoughts and right on the topic.

I'm not familiar with Ilea. Could you give me more information. (perhaps it's just different spelling of someone I am familiar with)
08/25/07
You write with very strong conviction and though there are a few problems with the sentence structure, your love for the Lord and your passion for His people comes through. Keep writing!