The Official Writing Challenge
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08/23/07
I love the ending!

There were aspects of the setting that were unclear to me (time, place)--they seemed to be part of a larger world with a considerable back story. In a story of this length, that's a bit cumbersome--you could easily have set in in a more familiar setting (Medieval Europe, perhaps) and then your readers wouldn't have to work so hard.

An entertaining fable--despite my confusion, fun to read and well-written in its genre.
08/24/07
Excellent ending. I hope you plan on expanding this. I was very intrigued, and would love to know more about these characters!
A good story. I certainly agree with the king's reasoning.